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It’s nice seeing this side of you.
I have to ask: Why isn’t the host sister named? It’s an odd juxtaposition, she’s like a travel guide helping the visitor set down milestones. Any reason?

Great job with establishing age through word choice, I see this person as a junior/senior in high school. I mention this because some volunteers, such as Peace Corp, have host families too as do college students.

It may have been unintentional, but one I appreciate: this visitor may be a boy, it would be a far stretch to assume the host family is that open. When a student is placed, the entire family is brother, sister, mother, father etc. So it works for me, a nice gender guessing game.

Thanks for entering. Can you put :Redux after your title? Thanks.

It’s not a redux… it’s the idiom challenge.. I’m confused. Did I mess up?
I was writing on the fly and didn’t come up with a name. :)
I knew you’d appreciate the gender neutrality. :)

‘It’s kinda freaking me out.’ – Knowing Lady Elsha wrote this… my sentiments exactly. :) This coulda been in the ‘Risk’ challenge too, I think.

True, BiC.

You don’t usually write ‘mature’ pieces so I just had to read. Funny little journal entry and rings true of that time period of life.

@Elsha

Phew, smell that brain fart?

I like this a lot, but is it weird that when I discover awesome Ficly’s are the result of a challenge i wind up somewhat disappointed?

Otherwise, I think this would be great sequeled or prequeled…it feels genuine or at least inspired by true events —-which I like very much

You shouldn’t feel disappointed because some of my favorite ficlies of all time are challenge entries. Challenges are meant to push us to awesomeness.