A few grammaer missteps but overall it paints a nice picture of how this person is reacting to the view, as well as quietly posing some questions about how things might have wound up this way.

The character thinks so fondly of the earth left behind.. but surely someone in space does not. Did only the rich escape the planet? Is this a natural progression, or was there an inciting event that made them leave? Cleared to visit Earth makes me think there was a nuclear war and that it wasn’t just the rich wanted to live in space. or maybe they have their own government in a colony up there.

Ok, now it’s starting to feel like Wall-e :) Don’t get me wrong, I liked Wall-e and my kids loved it.