Wow, third sentence, that’s some psychotic s**t. And scary to know it’s been thought and spoken too. “Can’t have witnesses, too bad all my victims are witnesses too.” That sentence scared the hell out of me. Yikes.

Oh, and the rest is great too. This seems to be a new style for you, or maybe a different voice? I like it.

Love the shift of focus between the two paragraphs; I thought at first that this was going to be a far more disturbing story that it eventually was. Well done for expanding your original story fragment (along with ElshaHawk) – the ongoing tale is really taking shape.

I agree. I thought the story had taken a much disturbing turn as well. Pulled the old ‘it was just tv’ trick. Good one. I like the contrasts of Good (Dad) vs. Evil (TV).

So who is this? Supposedly the crooked grandfather? Nice little series we have.

Interesting moment, and a very effective creation and use of an emotional roller coaster here between the TV show, the frustration with society, irked by a phone call, etc. Cool beans.