Disturbing. A little hard to follow in terms of what was going on, who was speaking, etc., but I had it figured out by the end.

Oh, and welcome to Ficly! Great start.

This messes with human perception, no clue if the writer is “the” writer, or “you” are “her” entering “your” first story. Think of a mirror image of a mirror image etc. It’s actually quite complex. The lines are blurred between first, second, and third person. Whose who?

It’s great.

Now I’m dying to know the backstory of this fainting figure! I totally thought the key word of the ending was “doilies” though, my own problem, but it confused me for a few seconds. Glad to meet you!

Thanks for the feedback!

I do have an idea of the backstory – might have to write a prequel for it :)

I loved the mirroring and identity confusion.