This one is definitely much better!
“Were the both him?” missing a “y”

Isn’t that just typical. Pick on the little boy, but when a gun is pulled, oh, suddenly there’s respect. :) Seriously though, I liked how the setting seemed to describe a gun itself. ‘The thick oak door… swung open’. Maybe it’s just me, but I think that was really cool. Really, there are good descriptions throughout.

Great depiction of the classic mobster use of the word, ‘made’. I like that you gave him both some levels of doubt/guilt as well as some convincing rationalizing and distancing of himself from true guilt.

what’s a guy gotta do to get some respect around here, eh?

I love the metaphor of the cameraman, I also like how Donnie seems to rationalize murder.

Creepy Hahaha

Robert, this has a great Noir feel to it. You have a knack for creating an image of someone by painting a picture of only a part of them; in this ficly, the hands.