I love the title, and the curious (perhaps unintentional?) metre of the first two lines. The style of the rest of it reminds me of the more avant garde end of sci-fi, Iain M Banks or Geoff Ryman, etc. Personally, I’m a bit more old-school in my tastes, but I appreciate the skillful writing all the same.

Very trippy. Nice description of both her moment of triumph and the overall idea. Could lead to lots of fun and nicely described.