Great moment and feel to it, a cyberpunk gumshoe type tale, right down to the synthetic whiskey. I loved the line about the term budget hotel not even coming close. Second sentence could be two separate sentences as could the line about reaching for his phone and etc.

Liked this as it did give off that real stench of a god forsaken hotel in a godforsaken place. I agree that the second sentence is a little clumsy , would cut the wiry as you refer to the springs later which does the job. The short punchy word now on the phone is a great place to end or in a longer story cut to another scene. The use of ‘The Occupant’ is interesting and almost seems like a title. Synthetic whiskey would probably describe anything that isn’t single malt so it could be set here and now in some ways.