This fascinated me – the contrast between the time period of the events and the setting of the story but somehow it seemed completely natural. I really enjoyed reading this.

Has a what if feel. I like.

Like this as it is very intriguing whilst setting the reader up for some obvious conclusions. You can’t read that list of injuries and mention Aramaic without a Western reader probablygoing to the Jesus place. As such this is a great example of economy of writing to throw the reader straight into the deep end. Jesus timeknapped or alternateuniverseknapped offers up a whole wealth of places to go. Who knows what happened in those three days in the tomb? The mention of the Order also sets up interesting plot lines to explore. It wold also be interesting to follow what the ‘Jesus’ might make of his situation or is it going to be a squeaky clean memory wipe and then back to bump into the two women in the garden and everything else that follows is literally history.Good job.

Very cool. I like the suggestions made by minor details—the commander=military involvement, “medician”=some setting other than a typical environment or time when we might say “doctor”. Great ending to and can totally see George C. Scott as Patton delivering that line.

Thanks, everyone, for your comments – always much appreciated.

Intriguing approach to some very well-known mythology! I like how you provide plenty of clues but never actually come right out and say it. Well played, sir!

Wow, reading through the first time was great and the second time even better. Like others said before me, the blending of time periods is so effective. Your descriptions of an event that is often seen as vaguely horrible rather than what it is- a specific, anatomical disaster- were so refreshing. Well done!

Very successful. The different personalities in the room come across very clearly even though there is no obviously significant effort to do so.