This has a great sense of place and makes Mars seem like home to someone. The descriptions of the landscape are written to make you feel the narrator feels that this is home. There are also interesting little hints for something else his ‘scant number of days’ sets you up for either a flashback or to the playing out of the why of this statement.

This has a great sense of place and makes Mars seem like home to someone. The descriptions of the landscape are written to make you feel the narrator feels that this is home. There are also interesting little hints for something else his ‘scant number of days’ sets you up for either a flashback or to the playing out of the why of this statement.

Dreamy and trippy. Could be taken a couple of different ways, which works nicely in this little space. Nicely written as well.

Really enjoyed reading this – there’s a lovely, languid feel to it. Plot wise, reminds me of the half-life scenario in Ubik. “I will not desert this desert” has a pleasing cadence to it. The ony tweak I’d suggest is excising ‘undoubtedly’ from the final sentence – I don’t think it’s necessary, and it slightly clutters up the line with too many syllables.