I loved how I could hear the accents of these characters – it brought them so much more to life. Somehow I imagine this set in days gone by, but maybe that’s just my imagination adding things on! I love the detail between the characters – this has happened before, and while not quite a love story it’s one of familiar friendship. Beautiful writing!

Liked the use of accent to, gave it a real flavour ( pause whilst I save the English to the dictionary). It’s never easy to pull off dialogue in an accent but this managed to, well at least in this piece, sustaining it for a full length short story or novel may be trickier.
Thought the slightly comedic entrance of the boy was great and the girl’s laid back response to it made me like her.

I wasn’t clear on the ages of the characters in this piece and so I wasn’t sure about what the dynamic between them was. However, I enjoyed how the accents were used to set the scene without wasting words or, in this case, characters. After all, there are so few to work with in this space.

A nice lazy, summery feel to it and likeable characters. I agree with someday_93 about the impression of easy familiarity between the two, skillfully conveyed in a few lines. A very pleasant read.