Hmm. I couldn’t really figure out where to go from there. All and all, I am not unhappy with it though.

Very powerful. I actually don’t think you have to go anywhere from there. In fact, I think you should let it end, it’s a very sad ending, but a perfect one.

I don’t think it needs to go anywhere else. It’s brutally effective and I think those three final sentences are great.

Morbid is the word that springs to mind. Deeply morbid. There’s something very disturbing about the simplicity of the title as well.

I like.

I’m sad now.

wow, really powerful and depressing, but i like it.

When people say “a fate worse than death”, this must be what they mean.