Definite mood that comes across in this one, and it winds up feeling like a Twilight Zone episode without being fantasy or sci-fi in direct nature.

It was a tricky read in places. Maybe breaking up the one big block of text would have helped. Also, I have no idea who said, “Dear, let go.”

The sort of creepy feeling grows through this piece, which is cool. Agreed that paragraph breaks would be helpful for reading, and there’s a few confusing bits – who said “dear let go,” why “presumably” the father heard the sax. It lacks a bit of flow but I really enjoyed the story!