What’s in a name indeed. You’ve painted a portrait of a fascinating character! The part about his daughter seemed a little bit disjointed to me – you haven’t given me enough that I’d believe he killed her, but that’s what I imagined that scenario to be (although maybe I’m just an eternal pessimist!). I would like to learn more about Adam Pierce!

Thank you for the comments! I’m really glad you enjoy the character.

The part about his daughter is meant to be rather jolting. It’s not necessarily pointing towards a murder, though it certainly could be! (It’s not in my mind.) To me it was supposed to be this thought that was out of the blue and perhaps alcohol induced, a thought that sort of occurs to you as if you’ve almost forgotten, yet it persistently festers its way to your conscious to make sure you remember.

That said, it also is simply a list of things that Adam hasn’t told them. This daughter belongs on the list.

Regardless if my execution didn’t display that, I will certainly work on it!

Well, that was quite a turn from what I expected. I can feel an alcoholic rambling sort of tone in this self reflection and I was impressed that I didn’t sense much judgement in this piece. Very well done.

Thank you very much! I appreciate the feedback.

An eerie story but one that isn’t easily forgotten! Usually I think repetition at the start of paragraphs can become robotic and uninteresting, but I think it really works for the character you’ve created.

Well, that turned dark. You’d think he’d invite some of those single ladies over some time…to kill or kidnap them. Lots of possibilities and lots of potential meanings to what is hidden and what happened to the daughter.

I, too, didn’t necessarily get the sense that hiding his daughter has anything to do with murder — or death, for that matter. I do like the juxtaposition of AA and moonshine in the piece, though. People are frequently surprising by those kinda of dichotomies they maintain in their lives.

Thank you for the feedback, all!

I plan on continuing this work once my muse helps me out. :)