I like how you’ve spliced memory with the action and drama of the story. I’m a little confused by the invisible knife though – is it meant to be a magical element to the world, or is it pain from a previous wound…?

It’s just meant to show the pain from the wounds he received when the bandits robbed him.

Thank you so much for your feedback!

I detect Shakespearean tragedy in the works. Will poor, ignorant Candra think that her inconstant love has forsaken her? I’d like to read more and find out.