Very nice. I dig the narrator’s voice and the way you establish his character.
It’s “brakes,” not “breaks.” Other than that this is good, and the ending made me jump.
Fixed the ‘brakes’, that is what I get for proof reading at 3 a.m. It did not look right, but I was sleepy. Thanks
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