Powerful and erotic, and well-written. Keep it up.

Well, that was disturbing and dark. It starts off so sweetly, and then BAM, we’re ripping open flesh. Not sure what to make of it, but well done.

Thank you guys! I just wish that we were allowed more characters that way I could have made what I was trying to say with this piece a little bit more clear. I suppose I was trying to say that Satan, demons, sin, or really just any harmful thing that we know is bad for us, is like this girl. She seems so sweet and beautiful to begin with, but then she begins to get more comfortable, it begins to climax, and her true dark nature comes out. But that is just me being dramatic. It could just be an erotic story of two lesbians. It depends what you decide to make of it I suppose.

I think the story carries far more depth after reading your description, Iris. Even Ficly has its limitations, so don’t feel confined if you ever need to expand a story beyond the site. I have often done so and returned to post multiple-sequel stories so it can fit here. Ficly is an amazing way to meticulously edit down your writing in manageable pieces and the results are always satisfying.

I’ve often thought about adding on sequels or prequels to fit it in here, but usually I can get my whole thought down with only a couple sentences needing to be added. You are right though, the limiting amount of characters has only troubled me a few times. Thank you for your thoughts. :D