Huh. Great re-imagining of a popular phrase.

Yeah, I heard someone cough the other day, which brought to mind ‘creeping crud’ — and a story was born. Welcome to my brain. :)

Love this. I love the inevitable, organic feel to it. Really really nice.

Dark and worrisome. I like how the sci-fi elements are merely suggested without some long-winded exposition to give them meaning.

Is this a prequel? Lovely to see imagery that is effective without being weighed down by adjectives. IT is elegant

I honestly don’t know. Call it a potential seed for a story. I’m not sure if I’ll expand upon it, but that shouldn’t stop someone else from sequeling. :)

Nicely done, I agree with Escapist that it feels organic.

This is disgusting, and my having such a visceral dislike of the idea can only mean it is brilliantly written.
I also happen to feel like I’m slowly dying from a fever, which doesn’t help at all.

The whole thing does have a horrible, unsanitary feeling to it, from the wet, ragged cough to the filthy alley and the scavengers. I can almost feel the fungus threading through her lungs, turning her mouldy as an old slice of bread…