really strong imagery and character.
The breakup of verses should be consistent though.

Ty very kindly!

I dig it. Has a little Bhagavad Gita vibe to me.

Agreed, it does have something of the Gita about it, or else Mabinogion. A medieval vibe, in any case. I also disagree with Drake in as much as I think that the verse structure works very well as it is.