I like that what comes through is the frustation of the situation with an urgency to it…and neither he nor we know who this guy is! Most enfuriating. Well done.

Maintaining the jerky, panicky, itchy feel of the previous installments very effectively – this is well done.

I like Panic swarmed at the edge of my vision like beating wings – suppressed panic, close to bursting to the surface. Generates a nice tension.

I might replace ’Alfie’s owner’ with ‘the girl’ again – seems somehow irrelevant and slightly distracting to refer to her via the dog.