This has the makings of a good love story, and there is some nice imagery – particularly the sun peeking through the windows, like golden irises.
There’s a bit of grammatical and syntax stuff that could do with a tidy up, to make for a smoother read, eg: She pressed the wooden framed door, chiming as she lingered it, foot by foot and you slip from present to past tense and back again, which is a bit disconcerting. But overall, I like it.
JonB