I really like how you turned things that are cold and unfeeling like gears and gasoline into something painfully beautiful.

The line about heaven’s clock is my favorite. Well done!

Great rhythm to this one.

Wonderful mixture of man and machine.

I like the intersection of man and machine that you present. Some of the rhythms are a bit difficult, like going from the first to second lines and from the eighth to ninth. The use of asphyxiation with smothered emotions is terrific.

Feeling time, what a thought. Only a real poet could think it.