I think the excerpt structure that you’ve chosen works well for this – I feel like I’m eavesdropping at someone’s funeral.

This strikes me as a particularly difficult challenge, in as much as it demands the writer to be explicitly autobiographical – not something many of us are comfortable with. So congratulations for stepping up to the plate. And in terms of content, it’s all there and it fits the brief, so well done.

I really like that you included shortcomings and faults. By sharing these, it makes a eulogy more personal and sincere.

This one feels very balanced, very real—like something that would be read in a kindly tone at the funeral of a guy who didn’t always make the best choices.