Very ‘real life’ feeling to that last line. I appreciated the Fairfax County nod, not that I’ve been there in a while. Fun jump from the challenge prompt, especially since so much of the sentence hinted at death and decay.

A slightly hysterical-feeling segue from the bizarreness of the opening sentence to the equally peculiar storyline that follows. Kind of works, though. Definitely a different feel to the rest of the challenge entries, with the focus on action and dialogue.

All in all, an original take on the challenge.