Great description of a way many of us have felt. I loved this but got a little tripped up toward the end, “…every drop of Saturdays”… I couldn’t tell if there was something I was supposed to understand by it being plural.

Best line? “glitterdirt, that’s all I’d ever been”

Such a true description.

Interesting piece. Poignant and dark which in and of itself makes it more interesting to many readers who can relate to the narrator’s situation. Unfortunately, the guidelines of this challenge specifically asked for the opposite. Works very well outside of the challenge.

I’d like to challenge the darkness of the piece. I’d say rather that it is liberating—it’s about the release of tension, not about light and darkness. The guidelines asked, in a round about way, for a positive leaving. A happy separation. You may not agree that’s what I’ve done, but I think that I have met all the requirements.