Ouch.
She seems like a good girl..
Guess I need to catch up on this series, huh?

Oh time for consolation I do believe- Hindsight is twenty twenty

I think the comma after that last but should be in front of it.

I like the scene here and the interaction between the two. The trip to the flat is novel but also very natural for both of them.

Comma moved. Strictly, I should have a comma in front of the but to link the two clauses, and a comma after the but to introduce the soft interruption “with a beautiful woman…”, but I never much liked using that many commas.

I’m with you on the commas