Now that’s what I call a looming disaster. Nice continuation of the scene while adding in some backstory/exposition bits to complete the picture.

I think the last sentence of the first paragraph would read better with ‘and’ instead of ‘but’.

I think you’re right. Thanks.

Ooh how exciting! I was once with an older lady, and she said the joy was in the fantasy of still being young. You echo this perfectly. Her voice is so youthful :)

I am loving this. It’s a fun set-up with a great main character!

Thanks so much for your comments! Fingers crossed that I can develop this further. :D