Hullo! Before I say how much I love your sleepless poem, a couple of notes. 1) The last line of the first stanza is clunky. I get that you want it to rhyme but you shouldn’t alter the structure of a sentence to fit a rhyme scheme. 2) You have a random capitalisation of “Now” in the first line of the third stanza. Initially I thought it would be cool if that random capitalisation continued towards the end, mimicking restlessness, but since there’s only one it seems a little off.
HOWEVER Your sleepless poems are sooooo relateable. They’re gorgeous. And I can see the continuation from the previous poem. Counting sheep. Counting sheep :)
Thanks Inky. I corrected the capitalization error. As for the lst line of the first stanza. It flows in my mind the way I read it and it worked for me. It’s not ideal but I am ok with it ;) Glad you enjoy my sleepless work. I am sure there will be more