So I read through the whole series—wanting to see where it went to better formulate my opinion and I have to say while it has potential—it falls flat in a storytelling sense.

What I’m confused about is “The Billionaire” character. Their arrogance seems extremely high long with their absurd sense of humor. This makes them unlikable and their later confession or whatever card their pulling, seem very dishonest and at this point, I couldn’t care less.

However, you did create a very distinct character, as The Billionaire is definitely a character.

Try better developing them or having a clearer plot to better the quality of the story. Even place Billionaire in a different setting and see what they’d do then write about that! All my opinion though!

thank you for your comments and a realistic rating. Something that this site sometimes lacks. I do agree with you 100%. This character has a fledgling possibility to go through a metamorphosis and find humility, but that would take many more episodes…Not sure if I can focus on him.

As with many of my stories, the urge to get it out lasts until a certain point and then, well, then it is just ficly…