The continuation into the narrative of the second visitor feels disjointed but still appropriate for the overall setting and idea. Nicely done.

Thanks! And I’m trying to mess around a little with the possibilities of nonlinear storytelling Ficly offers. I’ll write about the first and third visitors soon.

I love that the visitor can’t remember the most important details, AND that she gives her a paper of gibberish, like that is the end-all to questions. HA!