My apologies to J.D. Salinger and Lewis Carroll.

Fantastic. No apologies necessary. I think the Cheshire Cat deserved a good smacking. Probably would have saved Alice some trouble in the long run.

This just made me grin from ear to ear. I don’t think Salinger will sue ;)

excellent.

That was a hell of a lot of fun to read!

Ha…well done. I think, if anything, I’d like to see a little stronger finish, but I can’t think of anything that I’d have you cut to stay under the character limit. The style carries it.

I swear I didn’t know someone else had already done a Wonderland story. I’m such a hack.

Reminds me of the Looking Glass trilogy

That’s Authentic Holden. Well done.

Excellent.

That’s brilliant. Not crummy at all.

I bow to you sir

I really enjoyed Holden’s perspective on wonderland.

If you were to continue with this, it would even make me happy I’d read Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass, which would be nothing short of miraculous, I assure you.

And, even though I’m a card-carrying member of PETA, I think I would’ve smacked that damn cat too. (Not all cats, just that one.)

Grand in the fullest phony way!

LOVE it.

You captured Holden’s way of storytelling quite well… and I would’ve called him crazy if he didn’t sock the Cheshire Cat.

you set the bar too high.Well Done

If a body catch a body coming through the rye…

Brilliant

“I felt kind of bad about it later …”

Heh. LOVE this. So very Holden.

I would have flat out knocked his shit out. :) This story made me happy. :D Thanks for posting. Many people have, and will continue on liking this story.

Dude, you basically won the challenge.

Nice … I need to make a new blank white card so your story and Hobo Bob can be included in our next game night.

Thanks for not butchering him.