Hello! That was a nice intro into something more I hope. I see it as a nod to L.A. back in the 50’s for some reason. A Noir piece. I dig it, do you have any more in ya?

Very Noir feeling. Kids, don’t gamble.

Just when you thought it was all over for the suit, he got back up. " Ha, didn’t think I’d ever need such a thing but I’m glad i brought it." Ripping off the vest he tip toes his way out and into the wild. More gambling ensued… more debts to pay and again more vests to buy. A tragic cycle for this suit however a common lifestyle for thousands on this planet of ours.

lol, great story btw. I felt a bit sad at the end so added a bit of light above^

Hell of a write off! A lot of great tension in this scene, and the mystery of the disembodied voice just adds to it. Slight edit: Should paragraph 5 actually read, “Now I’ll have TO clear it myself?” Great job!

Something about this makes me wonder if “the collector” is actually the guy talking to the suit. I enjoyed the tense atmosphere you built into this.