Your use of one, continuous sentence would usually annoy me but it’s very effective here, creating almost a breathless tone that helps contribute to the heady ‘swept away’ feeling. I like the lack of specifics as well. We don’t know anything about ‘him’ or the place he’s being taken to but we can empathise.

You’ve nailed the feeling for me. Which is what this challenge was all about. Screw the grammar, this really works.

Thank you so much for entering! Good job.

Thanks!