Did the best I could with this concept. For a hint of what happend, the name of the woman is a clue. Feel free to spin this one off into worlds unknown and uncharted. The title is a play on the Hymn, “He Touched Me.”

It suffers ever so slightly less from the exact same problems as your other pieces. You really need to work on your mood and diction. Your plots are salvageable, but can’t really be saved until the telling gets clearer.

If you feel like you have to explain it, you’re doing something wrong. Ditto with the repetition.

Interpretation of the story is the whole point of its overall vagueness. Some readers will take a different tale than what was written.

If you don’t want people to interpret, you should make it clear to begin with.

Really, though, that’s pretty near the height of literary narcissism.

You really really need to read more quality writing. Lay off the junk reading, read a couple good books a week instead. It will show you what your doing wrong much better than me repeating the same criticisms.