Funny idea, switching protagonists from very disparate movies. I know you were writing in character voice, but the run-ons were still destracting. Besides, if I remember right, the character did pride himself on the trappings of refinement, including proper grammar.

Really like the combinations here. A good use of Clockwork Orange dialogue with great hints of OZ

A clever combination here, although I think it would benefit from a bit of linguistic editing. I agree with THX’s comment on the run-ons, and you could cut a couple of the uses of “the old…” Overall, the tone of the Clockwork Orange language gets across pretty well.

Not really being a fan of The Wizard of Oz myself, I’d kind of like to hear more about this Ultra-Violence of which you speak.

I’ll have to watch the movie again, but I do remember Alex using “the old…” quite a bit. And he did tend to run on in his sentences.
I also spent way to long in my proof reading debating the spelling of Dreugs, Drooges, Drewgs, Drouges ect. So proof reading the grammar suffered.