I dig it. I think you could bring the woman’s shrewishness out even more. Maybe she goes through the groceries and finds that he only bought beer, and not the wine coolers she asked for, even though she specifically reminded him that morning.

But maybe that would be overkill. It’s a good story regardless!

This is great.

I don’t know if you remember those Harry Potter book disguises on the cracked site, but when I first saw the title of your story it reminded me of one of those covers. I’m not saying the title is bad, but that every time I see the word “cabin” I am reminded of that horrifying book cover. I know, it’s weird.

Oh, that was quietly ominous. Lovely bit of characterization for both of them. And excellent use of the word ‘akimbo’.

havent heard tinderbox in same breath as cell before but I guess the cabin sets the scene. Nicely set out.