This is a bit rough, but I wanted to get it out of my head before I go away for the weekend. Chances are I’ll be tweaking it when I get home in a few days.
Falconesse, I love how this city is a direct opposite of Jesteram’s…intended or not, and how already the denizens seem to be closer to their gift of flight. Beautiful.
Really lovely. You’ve done a great job of packing a lot in here without feeling rushed. We got from a wide view to a close view to some action and character all in a thousand characters. Nice.
Nice tragic turn for the traveler. Again, and like the other great ones in this series, I find myself left to wonder if the traveler is close-minded or if the denizens are fools. Really liking the ambiguity.
I have to say that I loved how the girl is described as such a light, bird-like person, what with her stepping lightly and arms outstretched. Definitely an intriguing story!
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