Quite harrowing! A lovely description of the mother. I’m not sure that ‘captives’ is the appropriate word at the end. Otherwise, well done.

Very nice job of giving us the reason for someone to think they are helping.

I think you mean “captors.” But very, very good twist and thought process behind her madness. Fits the challenge very well, methinks.

Hey wait a minute do i need to send csi to check on the little ones in your neighborhood? Scary stuff…

I second Stovohobo.

Deeply disturbing piece. Well written.

Ouch.

Yet another reason to keep putting off children. I agree that “captors” will work better than “captives”, especially with that title.

Mmm… twisted.

lol, yes wrong word indeed. I’ll change it so people can comment on the writing, not my error. :P

I sort of get the impression that the narrator is either the husband or another child of the woman…Hmmm…

Definitely twisted, though I saw it coming even without reading that it was part of a challenge. But that’s not necessarily a bad thing.

This is the story I never saw featured, loving the ‘featured on’ date on the page!