Fantastic cadence and great images! Tad confusing at the end — I get the sense throughout the rest that there is a bit of a relationship here…. at least some shared time. So losing the name doesn’t quite fit (in my reading). Two lines CANNOT be changed.

which two? The last two?

When writing this, I was thinking about the occaisional one night stand. And, from time to time, those can be intense, can make you feel as if you’ve been together forever
Can make you feel like you don’t just want each other, but actually need each other.

Yeah, I was wondering about the whole one-night stand thing… although I’ve never had one that made me feel like I knewe someone forever. Not that I have had a ton of one-night stands, mind you! Yes, the last two. See, I liked them so much I couldn’t even write correctly!

Powerful stuff

very nice writing, I like this alot

very tender ..

i like stories with shoes!