Definitely begging for a sequel!

great begining! and Chuck is right. this just screams SEQUEL!

this is an awesome beginning, and I see you left a cliff hanger for everyone. Lucky me I get to just click right on the sequel and read it hehe.

There are a couple of technical issues in the first two paragraphs, but rather than fix them, you should just cut the first two paragraphs. They don’t propel the story along and they are not expository.