aww great job! i love it!

i really like this one…
My only quip is about the 3rd stanza, last line. It strays from rhythm a little.
My only suggestion is make it:

“Than a sad and pointless race” just to keep the flow of the working.
But i love the sentimental feel of this. Very innocent.
It’s really good.

“FLOW of the WORDING”

Man i screw up even my own critiques.

“Thankyouvermuch two drink minimum.. i’ll be here all night!”

SIGH …

Still great poem!
There I’ve said it. Cuz i did.. and that’s all. Ok.. i’m out…
Ok.. bye.

“than a pointless rat race” if you like that better.
i like the flow from nervousness, to trust and contentment.

this is just sweet is our little mask in love?

I just smiled at this one, it’s very sweet.

The only kink I picked up was the first two lines. Something about them didn’t fit with the rhythm and flow of the rest.

Other than that, muy exelente!