Interesting, I liked it

Oops. Funny little story, with a bit of a lesson even. Neat idea for the larger reality as well.

Nice.

I have a soft spot for body-mod sci-fi. I don’t know why. This is a fun exploration of the concept.

I tend to not like bold used for emphasis in Ficly stories, but it seems to work here, mostly because of the packaging implications. The phrase “forever under water” caught me a touch off guard, though, I think because it’s not the common word order (outside of “I’m forever blowing bubbles…”).

Congratulations for being the first person to take on this challenge! And it was not an easy book you chose either…was it purely random or did you have an idea where you might go depending on the sentence?

I thought that the randomness and provocative nature of this challenge may have seen a few more take it up. I plan to put one in myself, though I didn’t want to be the first.

Again, congratulations. A very fine effort.

Thanks for all the comments so far!

@jesteram: I tend to use ‘forever’ quite a lot, both in written and spoken things, e.g ’I’m forever telling him that he needs to sort himself out’ – probably a Northern English thing I’ve picked up. In my mind its a replacement for ‘always’ but with an implied ‘hitting a brick wall’, or ‘try, try, try again’ feeling.

@scratch’n’scrawl: The book was literally the closest one to hand – I think I was lucky – its an odd and unusual enough phrase that it helped kickstart the story parts of my brain!

hey this story is like when aesops fables gets dropped in the future out of the side of H.G Wells time machine. i like it i think you got some squables about you. this is good keep up the twisted.

I am glad I didn’t read your story before I entered otherwise I would not have entered.