BLURRY-FLASHBACK-FADE. I love it! Thanks for doing my challenge

Always welcome :) XD it was gonna be blurry flashback faze. But that made him sound like he was on drugs or soemthing. XD

I found the shifting POV to be far too confusing.

? really. explain, it was only shifting between the narrator and batman… in this one batman only thought/said something like once the rest was the narrator. if you are still confused or anyone else for that matter send me a note and i will try and fix it as best as i can.

I think what Alexa meant was that you jumped from her sky-diving to her jumping through a window int he last paragraph with little explanation, and it doesn’t make sense. You might want to break up that last paragraph to make it easier to read and understand.