Wasn’t too happy with how this turned out. Hopefully you’ll enjoy it more than I do. ;)

I think the ending would be more powerful if you left off the question. Make finding a bible (perhaps one he doesn’t recognize) the “oh $#!+” moment of the fic.

Other than that, there’s excellent emotion, and I like that he makes a deal with God (which you aren’t supposed to do).

I took your advice. :)

two thumbs up I think it works much better…has a more definite punch.