Hey tas, I think you were trying to describe the rain (that you really hate), but with all the talk of photography and lost love, it wasn’t very clear. Similies metaphors are great tools, but they feel thrown in here.
You started out with tears, hating the rain, then threw in the similie about the power being out, then told us you hated the sun, which seems quite the opposite from rain. Then you tell us about winning awards for photography of nature, where you say you don’t really hate it at all, and end with being tan. There is a progression from pessimism to optimism, however it is not clear what the point of this is. Are you describing the rain or the sun or nature or the changing weather? Pick one and give us lots of details about it.

elsh i think the scattered train of thought is reflective of the bold sentence about the drugs.
good work tas
metaphors and similes are awesome

tas please get a pic i hate to add friends without pics it messes with my ocd

hey tas go to the challenge page and check out the story under the author profile challenge called taz and blue sparrow know there is no place like home.
It will be up to you to say that was an exact portrayel of your last mental breakdown in which you jumped of the golden gate bridge.
or just lie lol but its always fun when peope put you in fiction

(ms. elsha,)

_ This is a challenge for the pessimists.
Think of a situation, a place, a thing, a person, that you absolutely hate..
And write about the beauty of it.
Write about the good things.

tas_13

I get what Elsh is saying. It’s a bit of an confusing piece. I think it would mean more if you focused on each individual thing.
(and I being biased and taking the side of the rain does’nt help lol, I, myself am in love with the rain and lightning. So gorgeous.. but like I said Biased opinion)

haha.thanks..

any suggestions??

tas_13

what does LoA means??

tas_13

LoA is League of Awesomeness. :)

I’ve read everyone else’s comments so nothing I add will make a difference. BUT, I will say that without the parameters of the Challenge, this is a good, stream of consciousness piece.

Before reading through the comments, I was confused (also) as to what was your object of hate…except for the fact that “nature” was bold.