How we communicated before cell phones, emotional telepathy! This is amazing that it happened like this.. I would love it if someone just.. knew.. you know?

ya.. fortunately for me… my connection to Janet holds today!
She’ll tell you – I’m weird this way !:)

@ kwatz …Hey you know what i was sound asleep and my wife nudged me awake to read this.You know it was all a critique until the last line then it just got plain rude. I dont know what it is about people like you maybe your mommies didn’t show you enough or love or your daddy behaved innaproppriatly with you but i dont care if i get kicked out of here, this is just trying to bring someone down for the fun of it. I hope you are able to look past my punctuation errors to see that you are just jealous wanker, i hope someday your perfect sentence structure and boring unimagintive ficlets get you the attention that mommy didnt give you, and you obviuosly feel you deserve. some people have enough tact to message people and offer help because they really want to help, i am sorry you are the other kind of person maybe that is why mommy didnt like you.

I hear ya.. I fixed some of it..
There are times my brain thinks faster than my fingers.
Can you please point out the parts that really bug you ???

I’ll fix them .. i appreciate the input!

OMMGGGG thats so good Al! i love it!

i mean al posted this at eleven at night i think that was freakin rude to put that comment it isnt like kwatz should be mad because you have errors he didnt pay to read it. That is rude.

Well.. i don’t mind some criticism.
It’s not like i’m NOT guilty of some of the things kwatz has suggested..
So I’m open to suggestions..

Eddie-Joe.. your passion holds no bounds- and I appreciate that.. :)

However, I did fix some errors, which i think really makes the story better…

Thanks for everyone for commenting.

yeah i saw it there were ots of errors but there is a difference between trying to help people get better and trying to tear them down. For example elsha or john perkins would have said hey why dont you do this or if it was too many to mention sent you a note not talk about how they are so rightous they cannot look upon errors, for christ sake who takes their self that seriously?

ya … I get it.. but in the end.. my story gets better.. and that’s what counts.
And to me .. this story is very personal.

good catches.. i think i fixed everything.

hahaha.. as I DON’T capitalize my “I’s” in my comment.
Man – truly a habit I’ve got.
Is there a patch for that?

haha! ALRO613.1!!!!! love it! Can I get ElshaHawk v. 22.0.1? I think it would fix a lot!

Man, I’m gonna be 40 this September.. I’m kind of like on ALRO613.40! :)

dang you look like 45 already…just needlin ya

No .. I just FEEL 45…