lol! awesome sequel! I love how you picked up the details in mine and made them even more prevalent in yours. :)

Thanks for giving me details to use. ;)

Man! I feel sorry for Janet. Hmm . . . Maybe later.

Feel sorry for Janet, eh? Clearly, you should write that sequel so I can read what you mean. ;)

hoho. im not sure about my sequel. but i hope you’ll like it. if you don’t please tell me, so that i could improve.. and please give me some piece of advice.. im an amateur..

-tas_13

Guess I was too late for the sequel (lost this page). I might sequel the sequel, though.

Oh, please do. I want to know what Steve’s doing in Germany, or I want Tammy and Janet to meet each other, or …

I like what you did with the character Elsha made. The only quibble (someone else used that word, and it works in comments) I have is that the names don’t sound real. I suppose it’s too late now, and it probably stems from me being born into a generation mostly void of those names (a mouthful, sorry).

It’s really a small, personal quibble. So anyway.

Except for Steve of course. Steve is a mighty and noble name that every parent should bestow upon his/her offspring.

(Also, I know it’s entirely possible that this story does not take place in present day, but like I said, my generation doesn’t hear Tammy and Janet much except in story problems.)

Stovohobo – thanks! I will be more thoughtful about names in the future. (I would love to change them now, but I think it would be too confusing for continuity. How are “Christine” and “Izzy”?)