not having the first part rhyme detracts from the eerie lilt you want in this poem. the lines are great, but it bugs me that the beginning doesn’t rhyme.. if they dance, then make the rhythm and rhyme a song. :) otherwise, eww, dead bodies!

See, I started it as a free verse and then by complete accident, certain lines managed to rhyme. Idk, it just flowed out of me. :P

Thanks for your feedback, I’ll consider it though.