I’m very confused, but there’s some great lines in here.

“She looked just like her”

Scarily tempting. So many times have I wished to go back and try to fix a mistake I made with a girl or woman. I’m confused about the robot saying that something is not an optimal result. Also puzzled about the narrator’s desire to re-experience a past event while remaining separated from it. Any prequel coming?

BTW, gotta agree with your bio.

I think it was clear enough. I had to work a little to get it all, but in the end it was okay. In the instruction of your bio, I will point out a few things: I normally double-space every paragraph break, including dialogue—it seems to be easier on the eyes when reading (just ‘cause Ficly has no indent function). In this story, it might be because of character limit that you didn’t, I don’t know.

Also, I might switch the 4th sentence around so it flows better, like …littered the tiny apartment—one bed, one bath, lilac wallpaper and rusty piping. You don’t have to; it could be just me.

Besides that, it was pretty moody and put across a fitting cynical, wasted tone.

Ah, I got it. Lovely little piece and a nice thought piece on loss, mourning, and what it means to go back vs. move forward.