O_O … >.> … fwbhykgbsadjv—BLAH! I hate cliffhangers!!! …. but they’re soo goooood! >.<
Your writing has great voice. I happen to like that voice a lot, but that’s beside the point. Everything here creates the perfect hook – the tone, the word choice, all of it. Solid work on this one.
Good tone here, makes the reader feel you’re letting them in on a big secret – very original! And, yes, it is cacti. Look forward to seeing where this is going, but be ready to be picked up on any weather descriptions now…! MH :)
Good tone here, makes the reader feel you’re letting them in on a big secret – very original!
And, yes, it is cacti.
Look forward to seeing where this is going, but be ready to be picked up on any weather descriptions now…! MH :)
K-Jellybean 
Eckhouse 
Mostly Harmless