It may need some rearranging

Conveys nice emotion, but there are some technical errors. The 3rd sentence should have a colon or an em-dash, like …in common: they will…

Also, the second-to-last sentence has an extra “are” and that “breath” should be “breathe” since it’s a verb. Finally, last sentence’s “then” should be “than” since it’s comparing.

All pretty nit-picky things, but I think it’ll help if you edit the little things. I also think the story could use some more fleshing out to tell more of a story than just the feeling—maybe add in an example? Your call.

the example i will have to think of a good one but the editing is always welcomed